#5SF : Empty

I looked into my own eyes in the mirror, and wondered. Married with a beautiful wife, and beautiful children. A nearly perfect job, with lots of vacation time, great medical benefits, and great pay. The house, and car, and all the things I’d always wanted. And yet, staring into my own eyes in that mirror, I couldn’t help but see how empty they looked to me.

Here’s my weekly attempt at Lillie McFerrin‘s flash fiction challenge, Five Sentence Fiction. This week, the prompt is Empty.

Please, go read all the other entries to this week’s Five Sentence Fiction. It’s amazing what creative people can do with just five sentences.


9 thoughts on “#5SF : Empty

  1. Ah, yes. Remember the poem that ended:

    “And Richard Cory, one calm summer night,
    Went home and put a bullet through his head.”

    I wonder if Richard Corey saw the same thing in his mirror.

    Nice story for the prompt!

  2. Hmm. This leaves me feeling sad and wanting to know why his eyes are empty, or at least why he thinks they are. What is missing in his life? Great piece.

  3. I read this quite slowly, as I did I saw that while everything seemed so wondderful and perfect, something is definitely missing. The thing which is missing is something this guy didn’t mention as he looked into his eyes, it’s somethhing which is as simple as the nose on his face. What is this missing item, what else could it be but LOVE!!!.

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